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Nexivian Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Well, I've read your comic, and I must say, not bad, not bad at all. :iconnotbadplz:

It's gritty, it's minimalist, and it certainly has a charm to it that's very appealing indeed. Frankly, the text, while it may not look pretty, adds to the atmosphere a lot. Although, if you were looking for a font you could type in with the same handwritten feel to it, I'd recommend checking out Blambot.com, as they've got loads of free fonts that'll be a little easier to add.

The only problem I can see is that there's quite a few anatomical slip-ups here and there that look a bit 'odd'. But that'll fix with practice, believe me.

My advice, keep up with these comics. Keep 'em going, and they'll be great in no time at all. I'd also recommend drawing a few pictures of bears and falcons from real life. It'll help with anatomy to no end. :D
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:icongreenpolarbear47:
Greenpolarbear47 Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! I understand the anatomical error. I actually started the comic a little over 3 years ago when I was in Grade 12 and recently got back into it. When I started drawing it, I wanted simple character that won't take long to draw in order to focus on the plot. I will also take you advice and start drawing some real polar bears and falcons to help strength the art of the comic. :D
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:iconarven92:
ARVEN92 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Hey there :D

I just finished reading your comic, and I must say you have some pretty work there :)

As I said before, polar bear characters are rather uncommon, so this makes the comic unique in its own way. I like how your characters interact and have a background, too. Sometimes I stumble across comics with almost completely flat characters, and that's never good. Aroara and Fringe's background is neat and steady, while Ursa's one seems to be a little more unclear. Maybe it was your choice to keep it a secret so you can reveal it later? Remember that Ursa is your main character, so you need to give her a full background. As of now, I only know that she is three years old and that lost her mother and father, but, for example, what about her memories of her first year of life (when she was still with her mother)? You could make a flashback page describing how she was doing back then. Was she happy? Where did she leave? What did she do as a cub? And why does Ursa always seem to be sad about her mother, and (apparently) never about her father? Did she argue with him before he died? Here are just some questions you could answer to make the story more dynamic and interesting. You don't need to answer me of course, nay, try to build the story in your mind. Who knows, you may come up with many cool sub-plots to expand and enhance your story! :)

As for the visual side, I need to say that your style is absolutely cute! ^^ I love the way you draw your bears, And Aroara too :) Especially in the latest pages, I noticed an increase of dynamism in your poses, mostly in pages 12, 16 and 17. That's always good, dynamic poses mean a more eye-catching, interesting comic packed with action. If you want to vary your poses, don't be afraid to reference on actual polar bear pictures. Study bear anatomy, go to zoos, analyze their behaviour, so you can get your characters to act as accurate as possible to reality.

One thing I may suggest changing, however, is the text inside the speech bubbles. Your handwriting is lovely, really, but if you write the text with a computer (e.g. in MS paint, or in Photoshop/GIMP/SAI, etc.), it would look more professional and cool. If you choose to do this, try and write in an uncommon font (don't just use Comic Sans MS or Papyrus, as they're overused on comics). You can download some nice fonts from www.blamblot.com or www.dafont.com.

Lastly, if you want your comic to get known and receive feedback, try to submit it to more than four Groups. Specifically, choose groups that have lots of watchers, so it will be more likely for your comic to be noticed. I may suggest :iconanimalcomics: and :iconcreaturecomics: among these, as well as my own group, :iconferalcomics:, or also :icontraditionnal-comics: . You can also search for Groups focusing on polar bears and submit your comic there, too. Don't worry if apparently nothing will change. Beginnings are always harsh, but with a bit of practice, you'll get good enough to attract many viewers and get appreciated for the nice artist you are :)

I hope I helped you with this comment :)
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:icongreenpolarbear47:
Greenpolarbear47 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much! You're feedback was extermely helpful! You mentioned a lot of things I never though of. :)
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:iconarven92:
ARVEN92 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're so welcome! :D I'm always glad to help you :)

If you have other doubts or want some tips in the future, don't hesitate to tell me :D
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:icongreenpolarbear47:
Greenpolarbear47 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Okay, Thanks.
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:iconarven92:
ARVEN92 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
No probs :)
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